Is the problem with this sentence to do with dependent clauses or sentence structure?
My friend wrote the following statement:
The problem is the cause of the pace of the reproduction of problems, (i.e. capitalism), because if they reproduce faster than you can solve them you don't even get the homeostasis of "imperfect".
I inherently feel this is bad phrasing or grammar or something, but I don't have the vocabulary or linguistic savvy to express why or how. My first inkling was that it might be the number of dependent clauses connected by "of", but I don't know if that's accurate. Does anyone have any insights on this?
P.S. - I struggled to figure out how to title this question. I wanted to avoid just asking "What's wrong with this sentence?" Apologies in advance if my guess that it has to do with dependent clauses is totally off.
grammaticality phrases grammatical-structure structure dependent-clause
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My friend wrote the following statement:
The problem is the cause of the pace of the reproduction of problems, (i.e. capitalism), because if they reproduce faster than you can solve them you don't even get the homeostasis of "imperfect".
I inherently feel this is bad phrasing or grammar or something, but I don't have the vocabulary or linguistic savvy to express why or how. My first inkling was that it might be the number of dependent clauses connected by "of", but I don't know if that's accurate. Does anyone have any insights on this?
P.S. - I struggled to figure out how to title this question. I wanted to avoid just asking "What's wrong with this sentence?" Apologies in advance if my guess that it has to do with dependent clauses is totally off.
grammaticality phrases grammatical-structure structure dependent-clause
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Regardless of grammar or construction, my first thought is that your friend is putting words into Bryce Laliberte's mouth, rather than phrasing it better.
– Weather Vane
10 hours ago
Can we (a) Confirm that we are discussing your friends sentence and not the original one? (b) We are discussing the sentence's structure and/or grammar? (c) Not discussing whether it actually means the same as the original (it doesn't). If you are solely asking about your friend's sentence then we don't need to see the original.
– chasly from UK
9 hours ago
We are discussing (a) my friend's sentence and not the original one. I didn't want people to get hung up on the question of what "the problem" might be (since my friend's sentence ambiguously started with "The problem is", thereby inviting that kind of question), so I thought providing context would clarify things. I will remove it if it only complicates matters, though.
– xxWallflower
9 hours ago
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a of the b of the c of the d is a bridge too far.
– KarlG
6 hours ago
A parenthetical comment should be in either parentheses or commas, not both.
– Barmar
5 hours ago
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My friend wrote the following statement:
The problem is the cause of the pace of the reproduction of problems, (i.e. capitalism), because if they reproduce faster than you can solve them you don't even get the homeostasis of "imperfect".
I inherently feel this is bad phrasing or grammar or something, but I don't have the vocabulary or linguistic savvy to express why or how. My first inkling was that it might be the number of dependent clauses connected by "of", but I don't know if that's accurate. Does anyone have any insights on this?
P.S. - I struggled to figure out how to title this question. I wanted to avoid just asking "What's wrong with this sentence?" Apologies in advance if my guess that it has to do with dependent clauses is totally off.
grammaticality phrases grammatical-structure structure dependent-clause
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My friend wrote the following statement:
The problem is the cause of the pace of the reproduction of problems, (i.e. capitalism), because if they reproduce faster than you can solve them you don't even get the homeostasis of "imperfect".
I inherently feel this is bad phrasing or grammar or something, but I don't have the vocabulary or linguistic savvy to express why or how. My first inkling was that it might be the number of dependent clauses connected by "of", but I don't know if that's accurate. Does anyone have any insights on this?
P.S. - I struggled to figure out how to title this question. I wanted to avoid just asking "What's wrong with this sentence?" Apologies in advance if my guess that it has to do with dependent clauses is totally off.
grammaticality phrases grammatical-structure structure dependent-clause
grammaticality phrases grammatical-structure structure dependent-clause
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Regardless of grammar or construction, my first thought is that your friend is putting words into Bryce Laliberte's mouth, rather than phrasing it better.
– Weather Vane
10 hours ago
Can we (a) Confirm that we are discussing your friends sentence and not the original one? (b) We are discussing the sentence's structure and/or grammar? (c) Not discussing whether it actually means the same as the original (it doesn't). If you are solely asking about your friend's sentence then we don't need to see the original.
– chasly from UK
9 hours ago
We are discussing (a) my friend's sentence and not the original one. I didn't want people to get hung up on the question of what "the problem" might be (since my friend's sentence ambiguously started with "The problem is", thereby inviting that kind of question), so I thought providing context would clarify things. I will remove it if it only complicates matters, though.
– xxWallflower
9 hours ago
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a of the b of the c of the d is a bridge too far.
– KarlG
6 hours ago
A parenthetical comment should be in either parentheses or commas, not both.
– Barmar
5 hours ago
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Regardless of grammar or construction, my first thought is that your friend is putting words into Bryce Laliberte's mouth, rather than phrasing it better.
– Weather Vane
10 hours ago
Can we (a) Confirm that we are discussing your friends sentence and not the original one? (b) We are discussing the sentence's structure and/or grammar? (c) Not discussing whether it actually means the same as the original (it doesn't). If you are solely asking about your friend's sentence then we don't need to see the original.
– chasly from UK
9 hours ago
We are discussing (a) my friend's sentence and not the original one. I didn't want people to get hung up on the question of what "the problem" might be (since my friend's sentence ambiguously started with "The problem is", thereby inviting that kind of question), so I thought providing context would clarify things. I will remove it if it only complicates matters, though.
– xxWallflower
9 hours ago
1
a of the b of the c of the d is a bridge too far.
– KarlG
6 hours ago
A parenthetical comment should be in either parentheses or commas, not both.
– Barmar
5 hours ago
Regardless of grammar or construction, my first thought is that your friend is putting words into Bryce Laliberte's mouth, rather than phrasing it better.
– Weather Vane
10 hours ago
Regardless of grammar or construction, my first thought is that your friend is putting words into Bryce Laliberte's mouth, rather than phrasing it better.
– Weather Vane
10 hours ago
Can we (a) Confirm that we are discussing your friends sentence and not the original one? (b) We are discussing the sentence's structure and/or grammar? (c) Not discussing whether it actually means the same as the original (it doesn't). If you are solely asking about your friend's sentence then we don't need to see the original.
– chasly from UK
9 hours ago
Can we (a) Confirm that we are discussing your friends sentence and not the original one? (b) We are discussing the sentence's structure and/or grammar? (c) Not discussing whether it actually means the same as the original (it doesn't). If you are solely asking about your friend's sentence then we don't need to see the original.
– chasly from UK
9 hours ago
We are discussing (a) my friend's sentence and not the original one. I didn't want people to get hung up on the question of what "the problem" might be (since my friend's sentence ambiguously started with "The problem is", thereby inviting that kind of question), so I thought providing context would clarify things. I will remove it if it only complicates matters, though.
– xxWallflower
9 hours ago
We are discussing (a) my friend's sentence and not the original one. I didn't want people to get hung up on the question of what "the problem" might be (since my friend's sentence ambiguously started with "The problem is", thereby inviting that kind of question), so I thought providing context would clarify things. I will remove it if it only complicates matters, though.
– xxWallflower
9 hours ago
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a of the b of the c of the d is a bridge too far.
– KarlG
6 hours ago
a of the b of the c of the d is a bridge too far.
– KarlG
6 hours ago
A parenthetical comment should be in either parentheses or commas, not both.
– Barmar
5 hours ago
A parenthetical comment should be in either parentheses or commas, not both.
– Barmar
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Regardless of grammar or construction, my first thought is that your friend is putting words into Bryce Laliberte's mouth, rather than phrasing it better.
– Weather Vane
10 hours ago
Can we (a) Confirm that we are discussing your friends sentence and not the original one? (b) We are discussing the sentence's structure and/or grammar? (c) Not discussing whether it actually means the same as the original (it doesn't). If you are solely asking about your friend's sentence then we don't need to see the original.
– chasly from UK
9 hours ago
We are discussing (a) my friend's sentence and not the original one. I didn't want people to get hung up on the question of what "the problem" might be (since my friend's sentence ambiguously started with "The problem is", thereby inviting that kind of question), so I thought providing context would clarify things. I will remove it if it only complicates matters, though.
– xxWallflower
9 hours ago
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a of the b of the c of the d is a bridge too far.
– KarlG
6 hours ago
A parenthetical comment should be in either parentheses or commas, not both.
– Barmar
5 hours ago