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He stared long and hard at the vestige of the recently deceased King Gosfred - his father - and at the throne which had begotten so much conflict throughout the past years. He failed to understand how this one seat held such power, and why anyone would be pleased to sit upon it. His grandfather, murdered in his own chambers. Now his father, who had let in assassins through his gates and not even known it. A foolish move, one that would surely mean his death, and it did. And the city fell with him.
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He stared long and hard at the vestige of the recently deceased King Gosfred - his father - and at the throne which had begotten so much conflict throughout the past years. He failed to understand how this one seat held such power, and why anyone would be pleased to sit upon it. His grandfather, murdered in his own chambers. Now his father, who had let in assassins through his gates and not even known it. A foolish move, one that would surely mean his death, and it did. And the city fell with him.
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This question appears to be off-topic. The users who voted to close gave this specific reason:
- "Proofreading questions are off-topic unless a specific source of concern in the text is clearly identified." – Cascabel, Laurel, Mitch, Jason Bassford, tchrist
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Welcome to EL&U. Unfortunately, we do not do proof-reading here.
– Cascabel
12 hours ago
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And a vestige is not a definite thing one can stare at.
– John Lawler
11 hours ago
By staring at the vestige, I mean he is looking at the remains of his dead father. Which is blood or his skeleton. Is there another way to word this then if it doesn't make sense?
– wertyju
8 hours ago
@JohnLawler, a vestige is a visible trace of something that no longer exists. It is definitely something someone can stare at. Wertyju, usually one would use the plural "vestiges" in this situation, but singular is OK. Yes, the passage makes sense, but no, this is not the right site for this question. I think writing.stackexchange.com would be more appropriate, but I do not have enough rep to recommend migrating it there.
– Old Pro
6 hours ago
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He stared long and hard at the vestige of the recently deceased King Gosfred - his father - and at the throne which had begotten so much conflict throughout the past years. He failed to understand how this one seat held such power, and why anyone would be pleased to sit upon it. His grandfather, murdered in his own chambers. Now his father, who had let in assassins through his gates and not even known it. A foolish move, one that would surely mean his death, and it did. And the city fell with him.
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He stared long and hard at the vestige of the recently deceased King Gosfred - his father - and at the throne which had begotten so much conflict throughout the past years. He failed to understand how this one seat held such power, and why anyone would be pleased to sit upon it. His grandfather, murdered in his own chambers. Now his father, who had let in assassins through his gates and not even known it. A foolish move, one that would surely mean his death, and it did. And the city fell with him.
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put on hold as off-topic by Cascabel, Laurel, Mitch, Jason Bassford, tchrist♦ 2 hours ago
This question appears to be off-topic. The users who voted to close gave this specific reason:
- "Proofreading questions are off-topic unless a specific source of concern in the text is clearly identified." – Cascabel, Laurel, Mitch, Jason Bassford, tchrist
If this question can be reworded to fit the rules in the help center, please edit the question.
put on hold as off-topic by Cascabel, Laurel, Mitch, Jason Bassford, tchrist♦ 2 hours ago
This question appears to be off-topic. The users who voted to close gave this specific reason:
- "Proofreading questions are off-topic unless a specific source of concern in the text is clearly identified." – Cascabel, Laurel, Mitch, Jason Bassford, tchrist
If this question can be reworded to fit the rules in the help center, please edit the question.
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Welcome to EL&U. Unfortunately, we do not do proof-reading here.
– Cascabel
12 hours ago
1
And a vestige is not a definite thing one can stare at.
– John Lawler
11 hours ago
By staring at the vestige, I mean he is looking at the remains of his dead father. Which is blood or his skeleton. Is there another way to word this then if it doesn't make sense?
– wertyju
8 hours ago
@JohnLawler, a vestige is a visible trace of something that no longer exists. It is definitely something someone can stare at. Wertyju, usually one would use the plural "vestiges" in this situation, but singular is OK. Yes, the passage makes sense, but no, this is not the right site for this question. I think writing.stackexchange.com would be more appropriate, but I do not have enough rep to recommend migrating it there.
– Old Pro
6 hours ago
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Welcome to EL&U. Unfortunately, we do not do proof-reading here.
– Cascabel
12 hours ago
1
And a vestige is not a definite thing one can stare at.
– John Lawler
11 hours ago
By staring at the vestige, I mean he is looking at the remains of his dead father. Which is blood or his skeleton. Is there another way to word this then if it doesn't make sense?
– wertyju
8 hours ago
@JohnLawler, a vestige is a visible trace of something that no longer exists. It is definitely something someone can stare at. Wertyju, usually one would use the plural "vestiges" in this situation, but singular is OK. Yes, the passage makes sense, but no, this is not the right site for this question. I think writing.stackexchange.com would be more appropriate, but I do not have enough rep to recommend migrating it there.
– Old Pro
6 hours ago
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Welcome to EL&U. Unfortunately, we do not do proof-reading here.
– Cascabel
12 hours ago
Welcome to EL&U. Unfortunately, we do not do proof-reading here.
– Cascabel
12 hours ago
1
1
And a vestige is not a definite thing one can stare at.
– John Lawler
11 hours ago
And a vestige is not a definite thing one can stare at.
– John Lawler
11 hours ago
By staring at the vestige, I mean he is looking at the remains of his dead father. Which is blood or his skeleton. Is there another way to word this then if it doesn't make sense?
– wertyju
8 hours ago
By staring at the vestige, I mean he is looking at the remains of his dead father. Which is blood or his skeleton. Is there another way to word this then if it doesn't make sense?
– wertyju
8 hours ago
@JohnLawler, a vestige is a visible trace of something that no longer exists. It is definitely something someone can stare at. Wertyju, usually one would use the plural "vestiges" in this situation, but singular is OK. Yes, the passage makes sense, but no, this is not the right site for this question. I think writing.stackexchange.com would be more appropriate, but I do not have enough rep to recommend migrating it there.
– Old Pro
6 hours ago
@JohnLawler, a vestige is a visible trace of something that no longer exists. It is definitely something someone can stare at. Wertyju, usually one would use the plural "vestiges" in this situation, but singular is OK. Yes, the passage makes sense, but no, this is not the right site for this question. I think writing.stackexchange.com would be more appropriate, but I do not have enough rep to recommend migrating it there.
– Old Pro
6 hours ago
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Welcome to EL&U. Unfortunately, we do not do proof-reading here.
– Cascabel
12 hours ago
1
And a vestige is not a definite thing one can stare at.
– John Lawler
11 hours ago
By staring at the vestige, I mean he is looking at the remains of his dead father. Which is blood or his skeleton. Is there another way to word this then if it doesn't make sense?
– wertyju
8 hours ago
@JohnLawler, a vestige is a visible trace of something that no longer exists. It is definitely something someone can stare at. Wertyju, usually one would use the plural "vestiges" in this situation, but singular is OK. Yes, the passage makes sense, but no, this is not the right site for this question. I think writing.stackexchange.com would be more appropriate, but I do not have enough rep to recommend migrating it there.
– Old Pro
6 hours ago