How do I phrase this sentence properly?
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I'm working on the about page for our website and I'm having trouble with this sentence. Any help would be appreciated.
"Before founding our company we made a living bartending and serving in
casual fine-dining settings but also spent a fair amount of time
working in banquet operations."
clauses phrasing
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I'm working on the about page for our website and I'm having trouble with this sentence. Any help would be appreciated.
"Before founding our company we made a living bartending and serving in
casual fine-dining settings but also spent a fair amount of time
working in banquet operations."
clauses phrasing
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I'm working on the about page for our website and I'm having trouble with this sentence. Any help would be appreciated.
"Before founding our company we made a living bartending and serving in
casual fine-dining settings but also spent a fair amount of time
working in banquet operations."
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I'm working on the about page for our website and I'm having trouble with this sentence. Any help would be appreciated.
"Before founding our company we made a living bartending and serving in
casual fine-dining settings but also spent a fair amount of time
working in banquet operations."
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Made a few changes, hope this helps:
*Before founding our company, we made a living through bar tending and serving in casual fine-dining settings, however we also spend a fair amount of time working within banquet operations. *
N.b the comma after “company” is optional and up to personal opinion - for me it make the sentence easier to read.
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How about:
We worked as bartenders and waiters, in banquet operations and casual fine-dining, before founding our company.
I'm not quite sure in whether you're looking for something more casual, neutral or fancy. Hope this has helped.
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Made a few changes, hope this helps:
*Before founding our company, we made a living through bar tending and serving in casual fine-dining settings, however we also spend a fair amount of time working within banquet operations. *
N.b the comma after “company” is optional and up to personal opinion - for me it make the sentence easier to read.
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Made a few changes, hope this helps:
*Before founding our company, we made a living through bar tending and serving in casual fine-dining settings, however we also spend a fair amount of time working within banquet operations. *
N.b the comma after “company” is optional and up to personal opinion - for me it make the sentence easier to read.
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Made a few changes, hope this helps:
*Before founding our company, we made a living through bar tending and serving in casual fine-dining settings, however we also spend a fair amount of time working within banquet operations. *
N.b the comma after “company” is optional and up to personal opinion - for me it make the sentence easier to read.
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*Before founding our company, we made a living through bar tending and serving in casual fine-dining settings, however we also spend a fair amount of time working within banquet operations. *
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How about:
We worked as bartenders and waiters, in banquet operations and casual fine-dining, before founding our company.
I'm not quite sure in whether you're looking for something more casual, neutral or fancy. Hope this has helped.
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